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Do you know how long the competence between bottled water brands is? Nowadays, there are a lot of brands of bottled water, hence if you are a healthy person you must know all of them, but as we know all the water brands are different in many aspects. And as a plus they fight for being the best brand in the water business. So now this is the comparison between three of the most important brands on the market.
Do you know how long the competence between bottled water brands is? Nowadays, there are a lot of brands of bottled water, hence if you are a healthy person you must know all of them, but as we know all the water brands are different in many aspects. And as a plus they fight for being the best brand in the water business. So now this is the comparison between three of the most important brands on the market.
In water brands there is a long list of prices. Let’s begin with Bonafont; regularly it costs around $8 pesos which is a very accessible price for water however, E-pura is cheaper than Bonafont, because it is from a different company so regularly is between $7.00 and $7.50 pesos which made it more accessible for costumers. About Ciel brand, I think that it is the most expensive in the market because everybody knows that Coca Cola Company does not produce cheap products so its price is around $9.00 pesos, as a result people complain about it.
We know that though water is water its taste is different depending on the brand. Many people think that Bonafont is better in flavor because they say that this brand is the healthiest on the market. In contrast the producers of E-pura brand say the water doesn`t have anything, I mean calories, sodium, and things that make you fat, but it has a heavy taste, I do not even know how to explain it but people say so because when people drink it they feel a weird sensation in the stomach. About Ciel not many people prefer it, because its flavor is a little bit salt, and it is not very good when you drink it, others say that is not heavy neither light.
Marketing is also an important aspect in brands in all the products in the market. But talking about water is a huge aspect, because most people buy the water brand that has the prettiest label. Based on my experience, Bonafont`s label is good but it does not have that look that makes the image special. Then the E-pura label is more traditional, because they use the traditional colors of blue and white and it is not a good presentation, so there is not something very special that can be emphasized. In contrast, I think that Ciel is the best one because it has a mix of colorful designs and obviously it is very showy to the view of costumers. Also it is very attractive for people and they consider that makes the product special.
Finally the competition between these brands is very strong, because they have a lot of fame all over the country, and also in others like United States where is the biggest producer of water brands. But as many people say I think that in first place is Bonafont, on the second one is Ciel and the least popular of these three is E-pura water. But at the end people take their own choices and tastes, so what is the best water brand? That depends of what you prefer.
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ResponderEliminarit is good topic to talk about!..you mentioned all the important aspects that a shopper need take into account. it was very clear and coherent, also you mentioned the most important brands, and it is a good aspect because for people it would be more interesting because they are known brands. The ideas were linked very well.
I did not noticed a grammar mistake!.so
you did a good job!
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ResponderEliminarWell I think that you can change the sentence: (So now this is the comparison between three of the most important brands on the market.) in order to do a formal essay.
The second paragraph, when you write “however” in writing is better if you write it of this way: (;however, ) try to write in third person, please omit phrases like: I think, for me, etc. so if you are writing about this topic is because you know about this. So write with security.
Third paragraph.- an essay is better if you don´t write it in first person. Change salt for salty because you are talking about an adjective.
Conclusion: “in other countries” inside of “others” I think is better because in your essays you need to be clearer.
In general the topic is interesting but you can improve a little bit your essay.